21 January 2017

On storytelling: It's my blog and I'll rewrite if I want to

 
Digital Parents Talks, the storytelling edition was too good of an offer to pass. Here I was, Saturday morning, ready to enjoy time on my own and to learn things I am passionate about. So I did. The event was very nicely organized and the speakers were lovely too. Liviana Tane had a lot to teach us about storytelling. Here are the notes I took as improvement points for me:
  • each story should have characters, a plot, acts, a timeline, a reason;
  • what is the complication, the reasoning?
  • where is the tension?
  • the steps to storytelling: idea, research, focus, structure, writing, rewriting;
  • the first word of the sentence is important/plays jazz;
  • specific details help visualization;
  • alternate between length of the sentences;
  • avoid adverbs and adjectives;
  • the title should be decided after the story was written.
The timing couldn't be more right. Last night I wrote this story and post it knowing it was not my best writing, to say the least. Here is what I originally wrote:
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Tonight, we celebrate

One late evening, on my way back home, I went wild. Not that wild, just "usual work night" wild. I dropped my worries about Cristian's homework and decided to live a little. I was happy about something that felt like a small personal victory at work. It was only natural to share my excitement with the 3 man in my life waiting for me home. I stopped to buy the ice tea my boys like but aren't normally allowed to drink and some muffins. Once I got home, I explained the boys where my joy came from and added that I wanted to make little celebrations a tradition. Cristian, who is such a family guy, was really excited about this. He helped me set the celebration tray. He also came up with the sparkler idea and insisted I had my own girly dotted saucer. We clinked glasses and wished for more special times like this.

It was short and sweet. Cristian was excited to have his own little celebration soon. I was excited to start a new family tradition.

A celebration a day keeps the doctor away! 

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After my storytelling lesson I rewrote everything taking into consideration my key learning points today:
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The celebration tray or how I mothered a tradition

The pregnancy

One late evening, on my way back home, I went wild. Not that wild, just "usual work night" wild. I dropped my worries about Cristian's homework and decided to live a little. My staying late at work paid off with something that felt like a small personal victory. It was only natural to share my joy with the 3 men waiting for me home.

The labor and birth

An idea was born in my mind and I had to bring it to life. I bought the Arizona ice tea my boys like but aren't normally allowed to drink and some butter madeleines. Once I got home I explained the boys where my joy came from and told them I wanted to celebrate. My hubby was not feeling well so he was a distant observer to the preparation part. Tudor didn't pay attention at all probably busy with the tablet. Thanks God for Cristian who was all in from the start. He helped me set the celebration tray and came up with some ideas of his own. A candle was his first suggestion, being the romantic he is, but daddy ruled against it from a distance. He brought a sparkler instead and a dotted saucer especially for me. Glasses were clinked and a family tradition was born.

The raising

It was short and sweet. Cristian was already making plans for his own celebration anytime soon. I was picturing us around the same celebration tray, 10 years from now. Raising a family is so much more than raising kids. It's also about family traditions to serve as sweet memories. You know me,  "I need my memories, they are my documents"

A celebration a day keeps the doctor away! 
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Say you like the second story more. I sure do. And here are 3 of my own guiding points:
  • start with something catchy to grab attention;
  • don't take yourself too seriously and show your vulnerability;
  • don't let perfection stay in the way of your writing. Write, rewrite and post.
A story a day keeps the doctor away! Thank you, Parenting PR, for inspiring me today!

P.S. my favorite post and the most famous one